Is this too controversial?
Sat Dec 29, 2012 5:51 pm
#29012- chris hansonMember
Feel free to delete.
Last edited by chris hanson on Sat Dec 29, 2012 9:51 pm; edited 1 time in total
Sat Dec 29, 2012 7:48 pm
#29014- CorvadeMember
It's pretty good.
One thing I don't like is: Heroin is an extremely addictive drug that can suck people in after only a few uses.
I don't know how writing suck on a paper is. Perhaps you can reword it better into something more like his: Due to Heroin's addictive nature, users succumb to the drug after a few uses.
Make sure you delete this from the interwebz when you are done receiving criticism and are about to turn it in. Don't want to be caught plagiarizing from yourself.
One thing I don't like is: Heroin is an extremely addictive drug that can suck people in after only a few uses.
I don't know how writing suck on a paper is. Perhaps you can reword it better into something more like his: Due to Heroin's addictive nature, users succumb to the drug after a few uses.
Make sure you delete this from the interwebz when you are done receiving criticism and are about to turn it in. Don't want to be caught plagiarizing from yourself.
Sat Dec 29, 2012 9:02 pm
#29021- chris hansonMember
Corvade wrote:It's pretty good.
One thing I don't like is: Heroin is an extremely addictive drug that can suck people in after only a few uses.
I don't know how writing suck on a paper is. Perhaps you can reword it better into something more like his: Due to Heroin's addictive nature, users succumb to the drug after a few uses.
Make sure you delete this from the interwebz when you are done receiving criticism and are about to turn it in. Don't want to be caught plagiarizing from yourself.
Thanks brotha. And yeah once I got some confirmation I was planning on just editing the post and deleting it all. I like your change.
i was mostly just trying to make sure that it didn't sound like it was pro drug or anythiing or that I seemed like a druggie.
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